Editorial Report 15b

Editing is an important part of the writing process. It allows for peers to review how we are doing and help us improve. Here is my editorial report.

Rough Draft Section:
One of the most important effects this class had on me was my time management. Up until this class I had always done things the night before they were due. I would write 6 pages essays the night before and turn it in without reviewing it (screeching tires). It worked out really well in high school and for the first semester in college. I even started using this method in the beginning of this semester but I have quickly learned that I can't always do this and that I must plan out when I need to finish certain parts of projects. I have always been secretly proud (sound of trumpets) that I can figure out roughly how long something will take me and then wait until the last possible second to do it. Usually it would always be the night before. But with the second project, I found that it just wasn't possible to do everything last minute. For those of you who don't know, I did my second project using the genre of a video essay. Video essays require lots of editing to look good. So I foresaw this and started working on it throughout the week so I wouldn't be rushed at the last minute. This started a habit, more like a goal, for the rest of the semester. I have since worked on all my projects throughout the week and not waited until the last minute. This habit has transferred over to some of my classes most notably math and physics where I have been doing the homework at least two days before it is due. This has relieved a lot of stress which has in turn affected something else dear to my writing process: Sleep. (Sound of snoring) (Transition to next section).

Edited Section:
Link

Questions:

1. How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

The content didn;t change too much, it was mainly just me recording the script.

 

2. How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?
 The form changed a bunch. I added sound which is very important.

Editorial Report 15a

Editing is an important part of the writing process. It allows for peers to review how we are doing and help us improve. Here is my editorial report.

Rough Draft Section:
(Music playing, fade in with speaking) Welcome to this podcast segment on my experience in English 109h! My name is Ben Barnett and I am currently a freshman at the University of Arizona. I am majoring in Chemical Engineering and am finishing off English this semester with Professor Sean Bottai. In this podcast I will be reflecting on certain sections of my writing process that have been improved throughout the semester. So sit back, relax, and listen to the story of how a young lad was changed by a college English class.

Edited Section:
Link

Questions:

1. How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

The content didn;t change too much, it was mainly just me recording the script.

 

2. How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?
 The form changed a bunch. I added sound which is very important.

Open Post to Peer Reviewers

This is a rough draft of my project for Project 2. It is important to make more than one draft to allow for the editing process to happen. Peer review is one way of editing in the editing process.

(Music playing, fade in with speaking) Welcome to this podcast segment on my experience in English 109h! My name is Ben Barnett and I am currently a freshman at the University of Arizona. I am majoring in Chemical Engineering and am finishing off English this semester with Professor Sean Bottai. In this podcast I will be reflecting on certain sections of my writing process that have been improved or harmed throughout the semester. There will even be a guest speaker later that will help me with my reflection on how my researching process changed. So sit back, relax, and listen to the story of how a young lad was changed by a college English class.

One of the most important effects this class had on me was my time management. Up until this class I had always done things the night before they were due. I would write 6 pages essays the night before and turn it in without reviewing it (screeching tires). It worked out really well in high school and for the first semester in college. I even started using this method in the beginning of this semester but I have quickly learned that that I can't always do this and that I must plan out when I need to get certain parts of the project finished. I have always been secretly proud (sound of trumpets) that I can figure out roughly how long something will take me and then wait until the last possible second to do it. Usually it would always be the night before. But with the second project, I found that it just wasn't possible to do everything last minute. For those of you who don't know, I did my second project using the genre of a video essay. Video essays require lots of editing to look good. So I foresaw this and started working on it throughout the week so I wouldn't be rushed at the last minute. This started a habit, more like a goal, for the rest of the semester. I have since worked on all my projects throughout the week and not waited until the last minute. This habit has transferred over to some of my classes most notably math and physics where I have been doing the homework at least two days before it is due. This has relieved a lot of stress which has in turn affected something else dear to my writing process: Sleep. (Sound of snoring) (Transition to next section).

 Now I know this might not seem to be connected to my writing process but it is actually a very important part. Without sleep, I am really bad and concentrating and therefore whatever I write when I am sleep deprived is very bad. (Sound of snoring loud) In the beginning of this semester I wouldn’t go to bed until midnight or later and then only wake up right before my classes the next morning. I always felt tired in class and most days tried to stay awake. My sleeping schedule was even worse on Sundays because I would stay up to finish English and then do the rest of my homework. After spring break (Tropical sounds) I realized that I could not go on doing this to myself so I started going to bed earlier and therefore moved my English homework time around so that I could accomplish this goal. The effect was amazing! I no longer was forcing myself from falling asleep in class and all my writing assignments were of higher quality. Another thing that was of higher quality as the classed rolled on was my research (Transition sounds).

Going into this semester, I hadn’t done much research in college. I did a few research assignments in high school, but they were super simple and didn’t require much. In the beginning of the semester I really struggled on my research assignments. I would take hours finding articles that would be credible enough to use in my essay and read the whole article to find as much information as I could. This changed a bit in the end of the semester. I stopped reading the articles from top to bottom but instead quickly scanned for information that I was looking for. I stopped looking for articles and then write my essay based on the information I found and instead decided my arguments and found information that would support it. (Transition song).

Well there you have it, my lessons in English. I think that taking English overall helped me be a better student by improving my time management skills, amount of sleep, and research process. I hope you guys enjoyed this podcast segment. Please join me next time, if there is a next time, I will be having some technical problems with D2L after May 6^th. This is Ben Barnett signing off, and remember the three R’s to use on your life: read, reply, reflect.

1. Key information about your particular project that you would like anyone who peer reviews your draft to know

This is my script for the podcast. I think it is good but any suggestions on content would be great.

 

2. Major issues or weaknesses in the “Rough Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those weaknesses)

One weakness of my Rough cut is were I should put sounds to make it interesting but not boring.

 

3. Major virtues or strengths in the “Rough Cut” that you’re already aware of (as well as anything you’d like to know from your editors about those strengths)

One strength of the rough draft is its length. Other than that there isn't much.

Peer Review

Peer review is an important step in the creation of a finished product. It allows for outsiders to make sure the person or group working on the project understand what they are doing and help them if they do not. Here are my reviews.

Title:
Production Report A

Author:
Cynthia Morton

Review:
Cynthia, I think your introduction is on the right track. The one thing I would suggest is talking about the English class. You do a great job of introducing yourself but have no introduction to how this blog post relates to the english class. You talk about how the semester has changed you but I think this project is more about how this class changed you. I don't know, this is just a suggestion. Anyway, Good luck on Project 4!
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Title:
Draft

Author:
Niki Escalante

Review:
Niki, your video looks good. I really like how you have your video laid out. The one thing that I would suggest is to use music and pictures. It is good that you have video of yourself but adding images might interest the audiece more. Other than that, good Job and Good Luck!

Production Report 14b

Working on a project in stages can help to make sure that each of its peices is able to function independent of the rest of its parts. Reporting on the progress allows for others to observe the process and insure that I am on track.

This project uses the Genre of Podcasts.

Outline Section:
Body #1: Time Management

Adaptation:
One of the most important effects this class had on me was my time management. Up until this class I had always done things the night before they were due. I would write 6 pages essays the night before and turn it in without reviewing it (schreching tires). It worked out really well in high school and for the first semester in college. I even started using this method in the beginning of this semester but I have quickly learned that that I can't always do this and that I must plan out when I need to get certain parts of the project finished. I have always been secretly proud (sound of trumpets) that I can figure out roughly how long something will take me and then wait until the last possible second to do it. Usually it would always be the night before. But with the second project, I found that it just wasn't possible to do everything last minute. For those of you who don't know, I did my second project using the genre of a video essay. Video essays require lots of editing to look good. So I foresaw this and started working on it throughout the week so I wouldn't be rushed at the last minute. This started a habit, more like a goal, for the rest of the semester. I have since worked on all my projects throughout the week and not waited until the last minute. This habit has transfered over to some of my classes most notably math and physics where I have been doing the homework at least two days before it is due. This has relieved a lot of stress which has in turn affected something else dear to my writting process: Sleep. (sound of snoring) (transition to next section).

Question Answers:

1. How did you decide to use form to present your content in the raw material you’ve shared here? How did the conventions of your chosen genre influence your choices?

I chose to use sound effects and transition music for this genre. I am going to record myself saying this as well.
 

2. How did the production of this raw material go? What kinds of any hiccups, challenges, successes, creative epiphanies, etc. occurred during the process?
The production went swell and there were no hiccups (just burps), challenges (except for the occational knight passing by), successes (other than defeating the dragons), or creative eiphanies (except for those of letters to the dear maidens. Haha! On Guard!)

Production Report 14a

Working on a project in stages can help to make sure that each of its peices is able to function independent of the rest of its parts. Reporting on the progress allows for others to observe the process and insure that I am on track.

This project uses the Genre of Podcasts.

Outline Section:
Introductory Section

Adaptation:
Script:

(Music playing, fade in with speaking) Welcome to this podcast segment on my experience in Enlish 109h! My name is Ben Barnett and I am currently a freshman at the University of Arizona. I am majoring in Chemical Engineering and am finishing off English this semester with professor Sean Bottai. In this podcast I will be reflecting on certain sections of my writing process that have been improved or harmed throughout the semester. There will even be a guest speaker later that will help me with my reflection on how my researching process changed. So sit back, relax, and listen to the story of how a young lad was changed by a college english class.



Question Answers:

1. How did you decide to use form to present your content in the raw material you’ve shared here? How did the conventions of your chosen genre influence your choices?

I am using the genre of podcasts so I plan to have music playing in the background and transitions after this section. I think the podcast genre has allowed me to make this introduction more personal.
 

2. How did the production of this raw material go? What kinds of any hiccups, challenges, successes, creative epiphanies, etc. occurred during the process?
Unsurprisingly there were no hiccups in this section of the process. I did think of a few things to put in the podcast segment later on and mentioned on in the intro.

Peer Review 14

Peer review is an important step in the creation of a finished product. It allows for outsiders to make sure the person or group working on the project understand what they are doing and help them if they do not. Here are my reviews.

Title:
Production Report 14a

Author:
Diego Alcantara

Review:
Diego, I really liked how personal you made your introduction paragraphs. I felt like I was listenng to you tell a story. I think this is a great way to arrange you essay because it is a very personal topic. One thing that I might suggest is in the thesis sentence you could mention how the english class positively or negative affected your time management, research, etc. I don't know if this will work for you but it is an option. Other than that, Good Luck on the Final Project!
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Title:
Production Report 14b

Author:
Emily Bond

Review:
Emily, I like how your introduction section is very exciting and feels like you can't wait to talk about your experiences in English. A few suggestions I have are (1) Introducing yourself and what the podcast is going to be focusing on. (2) You might already be planning on doing this, but an introduction song would be a good idea. Other than that, you are doing great. Good luck on the Final Project

Production Schedule

Without a schedule, things can be forgotten. In order for everything to be finished in a project it is important to create a project schedule with what needs to be done and when. Here is my Producton schedule for project 4.

Task	Location	Day	Time	Resources	Complete By
Body #1 script	Computer	Monday	Afternon	Computer	Monday Night
Body #2 script	Computer	Monday	Afternon	Computer	Monday Night
Body #3 script	Computer	Monday	Afternon	Computer	Monday Night
Intro/Conc. Script	Computer	Monday	Afternon	Computer	Tuesday Night
Record Audio	Computer	Wednesday	Afternon	Computer, Microphone	Thursday Morning
Edit Audio	Computer	Thursday	Day	Computer, editing software	Thursday evening

Content Outline

Outlining a project allows for the project to move smoothly and allows for all members of it to understand what the end result should look like.

       I.            Opening:

a.       Opening Grabber Ideas:

                                                              i.      Intro with really hyped up music and then a few words about how this year (2016) has been great. Then transition to how I have changed over the semester.

                                                            ii.      Intro with some smooth music then a joke about “welcome to NPR, Network of Personal Reflection” Then talk about the past semester and English.

    II.            Body #1:

a.       Main Idea:

                                                              i.      Time Management

b.      Evidence:

                                                              i.      First few months of the semester most of my posts were made throughout the week.

                                                            ii.      Second half, they were usually all done on Saturday.

c.       Summary of evidence proves:

                                                              i.      This is proves that I started planning out my assignments and gave myself time for other things.

d.      Why Important:

                                                              i.      Time management allowed me to paces myself and not rush at the very end.

 III.            Body #2:

a.       Main Idea:

                                                              i.      Sleeping Schedule

b.      Evidence:

                                                              i.      In the first few months of the semester I would stay up until 12 PM or later every night doing English on Sunday. This habit carried into the regular week.

                                                            ii.      In the second half, started sleeping at 10:30

c.       Summary of evidence proves:

                                                              i.      As the semester went on, I learned that the lack of sleep I was getting was not helping me. So I started sleeping earlier and that increased my effectiveness and overall wellbeing.

d.      Why Important:

                                                              i.      This change of sleeping increased my effectiveness on my assignments and overall health.

 IV.            Body #3:

a.       Main Idea:

                                                              i.      Research process

b.      Evidence:

                                                              i.      On the first project I did lots of research (because I had to for the blog posts)

                                                            ii.      Second half, I did very little.

c.       Summary of evidence proves:

                                                              i.      This proves that my researching decreased as a function of time.

d.      Why Important:

                                                              i.      This is important because I learned that sometimes you only need a certain amount of research and there is such a thing as too much unnecessary research.

    V.            Conclusion:

a.       Wrap up on how the project has made me a better student. Talk about what I hope to do for future classes. Outro music that is soothing.

b.      Wrap up main points and explain their impact on me. Give thanks to everyone that has helped me in English and give a sign off phrase.