Editorial Report 9b

1. How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

The content changed quite a bit. I added more discussion on the presentations and their use of rhetorical concepts. I also tried to expand on Dr. Blowers' comments on his presenting styles.

 

2. How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?

I added video of a presentation and tried to involve the audience in the video. I feel like this gives the audience a better idea of what a presentation entails.
 

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