Local Revision: Variety

When reviewing a essay, QRG, or any other type of literature, it is important to understand the structure of the sentences in the piece. Varying sentence structure makes the piece interesting and keeps the audience from being bored.

geralt, "Marker Hand Planning", 11/4/14, CC0 Public Domain

1. How much variation is there in your sentence structures in the current draft? Can you spot any repetitive or redundant sentence patterns in your writing? Provide a cogent analysis of what the Rules for Writers reading tells you about your sentences.
There is a few variations in my QRG sentence structure. I used many different sentence opening to vary up the sentence flow and make it interesting. What I didn't do was vary sentence structures and made most of them very choppy with little to no flow with the rest of the paragraph. They were really short sentences that were hard packed with facts and no descriptive verbs.

2. What about paragraph structures, including transitions between different paragraphs (or, for video/audio projects, different sections of the project)? 
The paragraph structures of the QRG are very weak. I wrote the QRG with no transitions to the next paragraph, but instead used sub-headings. There were very few introductory sentences and the conclusion sentences were lacking adequate summarizing of the paragraph.

3. What about vocabulary? Is there variety and flavor in your use of vocabulary? What are the main strengths and weaknesses of the draft's approach to vocabulary?
The vocabulary of this QRG is relatively basic with a few words thrown in every once in a while. The strengths of the vocabulary in this QRG is the simplicity of the words making it easy for people with almost no nuclear power background  to read and understand it. The weakness of this QRG is the repetitive words. I used "explode" and "exploded" numerous times which could be replaced with a better and more descriptive word.