Editorial Report 13b

Editing is an important part of the writing process. It allows for peers to review how we are doing and help us improve. Here is my editorial report.

Fine Draft Section:
According to the International Energy Agency the amount of electricity used in 2013 was roughly 20 terawatts. Most of it comes from the burning of coal and some of it from the burning of natural gas. The third largest producer of electricity is nuclear power plants. Uranium nuclear power plants currently produce around a quarter of all the electricity for the United States. Nuclear energy is a clean source of energy, unlike coal and natural gas. In recent years there has been a movement for the governments of the world to look at a second type of nuclear power that is consider by many as the solution to our growing electrical woes. Thorium based nuclear reactors are being looked at by governments like China and India as a solution to the growing concerns for electrical production. But what makes Thorium based reactors a better source of energy than Thorium? Thorium has two main reasons for being a better option for nuclear power than Uranium: it is a more abundant and efficient resource and the reaction is safer for the environment even if it has the possibility for the creation of nuclear weapons.

Edited Section:
According to the International Energy Agency the amount of electricity used in 2013 was roughly 20 terawatts. In order to keep up with this large amount of electricity, governments rely on the burning of coal and natural gas for over 50% of their electrical needs. One quarter of the electricity produced is by nuclear power plants. As of right now there are multiple types of nuclear reactors, but all of them utilize similar processes and have Uranium rods as their main source of fuel. Nuclear energy is a clean source of energy, unlike coal and natural gas because it does not produce Carbon emissions that destroys the Ozone layer in the atmosphere. But how does nuclear work? Nuclear energy is created through the fission of an element and the heat produced by this reaction is used to heat water which turns the turbines, generating electricity. The current types of nuclear reactors use solid Uranium rods as the fissionable fuel.
In recent years there has been a movement for the governments of the world to look at a second type of nuclear power that is consider by many as the solution to our growing electrical woes. Thorium based nuclear reactors are being looked at by governments like China and India as a solution to the growing concerns for electrical production. But what makes Thorium based reactors a better source of energy than Thorium? Thorium has three main reasons for being a better option for nuclear power than Uranium: it is a more abundant in nature, is an efficient resource, and the reaction is safer for the environment, even with the possibility for the creation of nuclear weapons.

Questions:

1. How did the content change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the content is being communicated more effectively in the re-edited version?

I added more description to the Nuclear energy process and separated the introduction section into two parts. I hope this will make it easier on the eyes.

 

2. How did the form change (even slightly - details matter!) when you re-edited it? Why do you think the form is presenting the content more effectively in the re-edited version?
The form did not change at all.